Lunchtime haiku

[pegkerr]

Twigs, barren of buds
As the breeze tosses branches
The shadows tremble

Comments

[sarekofvulcan.livejournal.com]

*wonders why Peg is applauding when she wrote 75% of the words* :-)

[pegkerr.livejournal.com]

Now all we need is for papersky to come along and turn it into a sonnet.

[papersky.livejournal.com]

Ay me! You want me to take your beautifully observed image and turn it into some periphrastic bombast?

You need two thoughts or an argument for a sonnet. The sestet should always start with a literal or metaphorical "but".

[pegkerr.livejournal.com]

I would really like to learn how to write sonnets. I mean, I understand their structure, and I enjoy them enormously, but I don't think I've ever written a successful one. I don't consider myself a poet. But I'm trying to see what might happen if I try writing shorter poems regularly, i.e., haiku.