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In the interest of story research, I went to the Aquatennial Milk Carton Races this past Sunday. I'd always planned to have Solveig be in a boat in the race, and I needed to work out some details. The idea was that because of some mishap, she ends up underwater, where a fish talks to her again.

I got to the race, and boy did I feel stupid when I saw the list of the rules. I'd figured there were lifeboats standing by, of course, and that was fine: I wanted her to get fished out of the water (so to speak) quickly. But of course they're going to make all the contestants wear lifejackets, which means that even if Solveig does end up in the water, she's going to bob right up like a cork, no fish-chats possible.

Of course, I'm the author, and I can decree some way around this. Um . . . she's on a part of the boat that's sticking out, and it breaks off, and the boat's going so fast that it goes over her, so she's under water under the boat for maybe 15 seconds. That's long enough. The trouble is, those boats are hardly speed demons. So I can come up with a work-around, but the problem is, it's going to bug me everytime I read the scene (it's been halfway written for a year now) because I'll know every time I read it of course it couldn't really work like that.

So . . . does this happen to you on stuff you write? You have to have something work a certain way, and you find out that no, technically it can't, so you pull out a lame work-around and hope nobody notices?

This is the sort of the thing, I imagine, which will bug me, the author, much more than any reader of the book. Milk carton boats have broken apart, and some have sunk, after all.

Click here, here, here and here for some pictures of other milk carton boats through the years.

[Note: and to add to my irritation, I still haven't figured out what the damn fish says to her in the first place.]

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Date: 2004-07-28 10:12 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] aome.livejournal.com
Could she have taken off her life jacket momentarily (that intent, anyway) to put on more sunscreen? And then, (un)luckily, that's right when she gets knocked in the water? Or maybe the jacket chafed her and was interfering with her ability to row. Or someone else was having trouble with *their* jacket and asked to swap. Or she initially had a t-shirt on over her swimsuit, but the day got too warm so she removed the jacket for a moment to pull off her shirt and then... Any of these momentary excuses for having her be jacketless work? Or inspire something better? ;) She would even get in trouble then, after she got fished out (so to speak) for having broken the rules.

Do you know what message you want her to come away with, after speaking to the fish? Not the exact words, but the impression and impact it will have on her? Maybe it would work better to go backwards like that.

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